Chapter 2 page 19

Chapter 2 page 19
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(pgs 19-20)
Some other truths are revealed.

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December 31, 2015

Alexk

Something tells me that maybe the expression on Mischief's face in panel two should have convinced our heroes that the Champion and good ol' Miz agreeing to help might actually be the worst-case scenario here. I mean, okay, it's possible that the red-haired lady noticed earlier that the guy has zero sense of humor, is always solemn and would never play pranks on anyone etc., but some mild clues in the previous pages - and you can freely call me Sherlock Holmes here - might indicate that "Mischief" is not meant as an ironic nickname.

But seriously, I love your expressions - they are really, well, expressive (I need a bigger vocabulary darnit). It's also pretty awesome how you make them work even though Vald has scars on his face and Mischief has tattoos and brow piercings. I'm really impressed how you have pulled that off without making it seem unnatural or stilted.

Also I have no idea what magic you have wrought to make the Champion so vibrant. It's like she always pops out from the rest of the characters. You can practically feel her presence both on this and on the other pages. Great job! We haven't yet seen much of her personality but I have high hopes for her.

Last point: what has been seen of your plot up to this point seems original and intriguing. I have some concerns regarding the worldbuilding (did I miss the reason why almost no one has guns? What happened to international diplomacy and alliances - we saw those four human ambassadors/negotiators in the prologue, but if modern technology has broken down, how is information exchanged between governments and within countries in a timely manner? What kind of central government there even is, since apparently everybody is murdering people left and right without any worries that there will be a national manhunt to catch them? At least the Champion and Mischief qualify as mass murderers at this point we are still at chapter one.), but most of them may not be relevant for the story. I'm really looking forward to seeing how the plot progresses.

Erm, this comment ended up being something like four times as long as expected... Sorry?

TL;DR: Great comic!

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December 31, 2015

Alexk

Okay, I just realized this is actually chapter two already... Can I use "I was too engrossed in reading the comic to pay attentions to chapter breaks" as an excuse?

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December 31, 2015

toherrys

Yea no he's fully earned that name :D And asking these two to help will end up having some... unexpected results.

I'm so glad she stands out! I really try to work on that, so happy it's coming off right!

Ah yea I really haven't focused on explaining the ways of this world yet :D Don't want to go all infodump on everyone. There are reasons for it all and I probably should do a world info page or something >.>

And that's a very good excuse haha!

But thank you so much for everything, this comment was awesome!

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